1 answer
Arfa
Student
Lahore, Punjab
2
Questions
Updated
869 views
Request for Feedback on My Motivation Letter for Turkey Scholarship?
Hi everyone,
I am applying for the Turkey Burslari / KAU scholarship and I have drafted my motivation letter / SOP. I would really appreciate it if you could give me some feedback on clarity, structure, and impact.
Here is my draft:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wHT2B3otW-3F6zDTdQ5nvUrE9HOPLx1g3xCLazi9ggQ/edit?usp=sharing
A few things I am especially concerned about:
Does it clearly explain why I want to study Computer Science?
Does it show my interest in studying in Turkey?
Is the story flow and structure easy to follow?
Any other improvement suggestions are welcome.
Thank you so much for your help!
Login to comment
1 answer
Michelle M.
Actress
3276
Answers
Updated
Michelle’s Answer
Hello, Arfa !
Wow, you have written an outstanding and quite impressive motivation letter ! Your English is great and vocabulary is consistent and well descriptive.
What impresses me the most about your letter is that you have justified all facets of wanting to study your subject and you show a motivation to learn by the activities you have done. You also have specific career goals which is very important for scholarship committees to know. If they know your professional goals, they're more apt to justify awarding you a scholarship to make it happen.
It definitely explains clearly why you want to study computer science. You have also effectively explained why you want to study in Turkey which shows that you've given much thought about it. The flow and structure of your writing is good and I wouldn't change any part of it. It is of a mature level compared to some essays I have read.
I do not have any additional comments about it except that you should definitely use this letter. It may help to get more than just one feedback on it, but in my opinion, it's good to go.
I hope this helps and I wish you all the best !
Wow, you have written an outstanding and quite impressive motivation letter ! Your English is great and vocabulary is consistent and well descriptive.
What impresses me the most about your letter is that you have justified all facets of wanting to study your subject and you show a motivation to learn by the activities you have done. You also have specific career goals which is very important for scholarship committees to know. If they know your professional goals, they're more apt to justify awarding you a scholarship to make it happen.
It definitely explains clearly why you want to study computer science. You have also effectively explained why you want to study in Turkey which shows that you've given much thought about it. The flow and structure of your writing is good and I wouldn't change any part of it. It is of a mature level compared to some essays I have read.
I do not have any additional comments about it except that you should definitely use this letter. It may help to get more than just one feedback on it, but in my opinion, it's good to go.
I hope this helps and I wish you all the best !